A blog for the summer 2016 NEiA Advanced Layout class with instructor, Coni Porter. The purpose is to offer faculty and peer feedback in a timely manner, allowing and encouraging the students to progress in a focused and productive way.
For your cover, I really like what you've done with the photo within a shape effect. Very nice! But I think the cover might be too plain? Maybe if you add a line under your business name describing what your business is? Because I'm trying to look at this from a perspective if I didn't know what this company was, and I don't think I would be able to recognize what this company was about. Just a thought.
I really like the photos you've chosen and they make sense with your company, but I wonder if there is too much free space for these photos. In other words, maybe you need some more information? Also, I'm not sure because I can't tell from this view, but how will the text in the low opacity white box on top of the photo be cut going over to the other page? Does it cut in between the words awkwardly? Maybe you can split the text into 2 separate longer, vertical columns so then you can have info on both pages AND make it look like you have more text to take up space on the page. Also I think I would add some more leading which I think will also help you with taking up more space as well as making this more pleasing to read. It looks a bit squished right now, and the point size is a bit small. I like on the inside left panel how you've added some hierarchy to the top with the larger point size paragraph.
Sebastian, Like I've said before, the photos you've chosen make a huge impact. They are beautiful and full of nature, and they complement each other. I have the same problem it seems that Eleni has addressed where your cover is a bit plain. Mine is too, but I would suggest something similar to what Eleni said because some people may not know what Pulp is and if you just put something like "paper factory" or something along those lines it would give people a better impression. Nice job.
Sebastian, I agree with what’s been said above – and wonder if you added a short line on the cover like “Making paper for the future” or ”Making paper since 1903”” or something that clarifies what Pulp makes.
PS – I still think you should silhouette that tree top and bring it in front of the white translucent text box!
Sebastian - You have a clean design and layout. I have nothing to suggest unless why do you put a line after the logo on the front page?
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ReplyDeleteI love the clean look of your brochure.
For your cover, I really like what you've done with the photo within a shape effect. Very nice! But I think the cover might be too plain? Maybe if you add a line under your business name describing what your business is? Because I'm trying to look at this from a perspective if I didn't know what this company was, and I don't think I would be able to recognize what this company was about. Just a thought.
I really like the photos you've chosen and they make sense with your company, but I wonder if there is too much free space for these photos. In other words, maybe you need some more information? Also, I'm not sure because I can't tell from this view, but how will the text in the low opacity white box on top of the photo be cut going over to the other page? Does it cut in between the words awkwardly? Maybe you can split the text into 2 separate longer, vertical columns so then you can have info on both pages AND make it look like you have more text to take up space on the page. Also I think I would add some more leading which I think will also help you with taking up more space as well as making this more pleasing to read. It looks a bit squished right now, and the point size is a bit small. I like on the inside left panel how you've added some hierarchy to the top with the larger point size paragraph.
Other than that, great work so far!
Sebastian,
ReplyDeleteLike I've said before, the photos you've chosen make a huge impact. They are beautiful and full of nature, and they complement each other. I have the same problem it seems that Eleni has addressed where your cover is a bit plain. Mine is too, but I would suggest something similar to what Eleni said because some people may not know what Pulp is and if you just put something like "paper factory" or something along those lines it would give people a better impression. Nice job.
Sebastian,
ReplyDeleteI agree with what’s been said above – and wonder if you added a short line on the cover like “Making paper for the future” or ”Making paper since 1903”” or something that clarifies what Pulp makes.
PS – I still think you should silhouette that tree top and bring it in front of the white translucent text box!
Got nothing to add, love the way this is turning out.
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